Bryan Davis critiqued the first part of my space opera.
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Submission #1 – Voyage (By Jessi)
A chilly wind swept across the barren landscape, throwing dust into the air. Only a few tough grasses struggled for survival in Locostwa’s cracked soil.
I tore my gaze away from…
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